Chapter Three
In this the third chapter of The Mind’s Eye by Kevin Clark, I learned how to use different sounds in writing, and not just things you hear, but things like rhyme, and assonance, and repetition, and vernacular because as was stated in my textbook, “Poetry apples to the ear”. I am not one who has ever been very good as writing poems that rhymed so when I read that that’s not the only way to appeal to the ear when writing poetry I was very excited. I had to write five of seven prompts given me from this chapter and here I chose two of the five to perfect.
The Hearing Tree Final DraftIn my revised version of the poem I fixed a few grammatical errors, and something that I did not do a very good job of in my first draft was effectively conveying the fact that this tree was broken and hurting. And that the reason that he was broken and hurting was becuase of those who insulted him based on the way he looked and not because he did anything mean. So I made my point more clear and helped my reader to see the pain in the scars of the tree. I also changed the title from The Hearing Tree to The Broken Tree.
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This here is a picture of myself when I was six years old, I am putting this here to show the innocence in me. This is a picture before pain, and hurt. And I stand tall and strong and act like nothing bothers me but underneath all of that is this six year old girl who just wants to be loved.
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The Hearing Tree First Draft
The inspiration for this poem was bullying. I have been bullied, I know many people who have been bullied, and I know many bullies and I wanted to write a poem showing something that I’ve always wanted to do to those who hurt me. I have always wanted them to touch my heart and to legitimately feel the pain and the suffering that they have caused me. In the prompt for this poem I was challenged to write a poem without any punctuation which was very hard for me to do but I was able to in the end.
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A Storm Final Draft
To fix this poem I fixed a few grammar mistakes and made the things that the girls were saying more clear. And I also added a few concrete details as I struggle to do very often.
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Here is a picture of my friends and me at our homecoming dance earlier in the school year.
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A Storm First Draft
For this poem the prompt was to write a poem using the vernacular my friends and I use with each other which is not very few off from how I write other than a few y’all’s and it’s a little less proper. I was then to use that vernacular and put my friends and me in a dangerous situation. I decided to place my friends and me in the middle of the woods on a particular stormy night with a not so friendly sky.
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